So how would you write this?

I suppose I would erase it:

And here was the recipe:

"Use no superfluous word, no adjective, which does not reveal something. Don't use such an expression as 'dim land of piece.' It dulls the image. It mixes an abstraction with the concrete. It comes from the writer's not realizing that the natural object is always the adequate symbol. Go in fear of abstractions. "~ Ezra Pound

Visit this site at your own cost...

...because Erasures are addicting.

When we were Mexican, revised. by Rachel Pinkstone

*Original Text: Bohemian San Francisco by Clarence E. Edwords

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It Begins...

 

[The New one talks like me—She is for ever rid] by Rachel Pinkstone

*Original Text: A Bundle of Letters by Henry James

My work here begins with a piece of found poetry, if you will, in order to ease the reader into the creative, instructive and ridiculous nature that I plan to provide.